B&A: Is this any good (I'm 15)?

It's really good writing. I read the whole story and thought it was great. The beginning with the guy drenched in pee was funny but also it made me less interested in the story. Don't change it on my judgment because that's just how i felt and also I wouldn't change it because even thought I lost interest because of that line, I was also interested because of how I understood the funniness of the line so don't change it. Really over all it was very good. By the way it was written I thought you were in your early twenties. You're really good at writing. Would like to read more and give my opinion again if you have more. Hope this helped! :)